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[Antonio Correia]

I am posting this photo here just to receive comments.
Thank you.
Just click here to get a better view, please.

[adiallo]

Hi Antonio,
Let me preface this by saying I much prefer to give "critical" comments both good and bad, rather than a simple "nice job" or the like.

Train travel in India conjures up lots of "romaticized" notions in the West, so your subject matter has a lot going for it in terms of drawing in viewers. Having said that, I think tighter cropping, ie losing the overhead luggage bins might more easily draw attention to your primary subject. Right now there are lots of elements fighting for my attention. Perhaps you want to convey the cramped confines of train travel, but from its current perspective the shot makes me feel like the photographer was cramped, more so than the seated passenger. Another benefit of a tighter crop could be to make the image less literal and a bit more abstract, forcing the viewer to piece together the story. Who is she? Where is she going? etc.

Something else that might be interesting in a print would be to make it very very small, maybe 4 inches on the long side. Even uncropped, this could provide a sense of cramped quarters and give the image a delicacy that may be lost at 8x10 and larger print sizes. The tonalities look good, but if you were envisioning this as a large print, you might consider more density in the shadows so the print doesn't start to feel flat.

[Antonio Correia]

adiallo, on May 14 2007, 10:49 PM, said:

Hi Antonio, Let me preface this by saying I much prefer to give "critical" comments both good and bad, rather than a simple "nice job" or the like...

Hello Idiallo.
Let me thank you for taking the trouble to comment my picture.
And let me tell you that I absolutelly agree with your quoted preference: no simple comments, which add almost nothing the photographer.

Refering to your comment of the photography itself, you do know that this kind of comment is very subjective.
Neverless, I agree with you.

But don't you think that a tighter crop would dis-contextualize the woman ?
I mean, A tighter crop would show a woman almost out of context. And she is in a train with luggadge above, people in front, looking trought the window, thinking perhaps about what she is going to cook for dinner.

As you know, the space inside a train is not very large and I was shooting with a 20D (1.6 crop) with the Canon 16-35. I could not go back further. Other people were travelling in the train.

Well, Iliallo these are just lauzy excuses of an amateur ...

One last remark: I have not received a notification mail stating you had anwsered.
May be this is my problem.
I have to go and look at the settings here.

Thank you again Idiallo and I wish you much sucess with your book.

[adiallo]

Antonio Correia, on May 15 2007, 06:48 AM, said:

One last remark: I have not received a notification mail stating you had anwsered.
May be this is my problem.
I have to go and look at the settings here.

Antonio,
When you post you should see a checkbox that says Enable email notification of replies. Check that and you should get emails when people reply. If you did that already let me know and I'll doublecheck the forum settings.

[Antonio Correia]

adiallo, on May 15 2007, 02:13 PM, said:

Antonio,
When you post you should see a checkbox that says Enable email notification of replies. Check that and you should get emails when people reply. If you did that already let me know and I'll doublecheck the forum settings.

Hello Adiallo.
Thank you. I have done it and I hope it will work.
Cheers